[Razz]

aight so I dropped a song on soundcloud, listen if you want to.
not really interested in critique cuz at the end of the day im gonna drop shit i like.

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[Decay]

heavy beat is dope

Good rhymes, decent flow, i say keep at it man


Can I have the lyrics?

EDIT: i found the lyrics and they good. 

"Bakery putting this hash in my bread

Helps me escape all these feelings of dread" 

Have you been to my workplace??????

[StephanGH]

Decent enough

[Zaidplays]

Someone say Lil Skies?

[Kvatch]

The beat has been well produced, vocals are a bit loud though and sound untreated. Maybe experiment with guitar amp simulators on your vocals, even just a clean one. Noise gates are also great at removing unwanted breath noises, too, cause you know, not breathing is gangster and all that.

Reverb and delay is also a must on vocals. Abuse the shit out of it and see immediate improvements.

I know you said you don't want critique but in the music industry, contacts are a better tool than any DAW money can buy. You want critique. Quality over quantity applies to most things except dropping music. You want quantity over quality, because the more you drop, the more critique you'll get on your music and therefore the better your production skills will become. I see your point though. Critique gets tiring if it's just people hating on your music and not giving constructive feedback.

Good luck man

[Razz]

heavy beat is dope

Good rhymes, decent flow, i say keep at it man


Can I have the lyrics?

EDIT: i found the lyrics and they good. 

"Bakery putting this hash in my bread

Helps me escape all these feelings of dread" 

Have you been to my workplace??????

haha ofc man! na but i dont really do edibles its more a reference to my homie who roll my joints cause im a shitty roller. Referring to my homie as 'the bakery' and the bread is supposed to be the spliff

[Razz]

The beat has been well produced, vocals are a bit loud though and sound untreated. Maybe experiment with guitar amp simulators on your vocals, even just a clean one. Noise gates are also great at removing unwanted breath noises, too, cause you know, not breathing is gangster and all that.

Reverb and delay is also a must on vocals. Abuse the shit out of it and see immediate improvements.

I know you said you don't want critique but in the music industry, contacts are a better tool than any DAW money can buy. You want critique. Quality over quantity applies to most things except dropping music. You want quantity over quality, because the more you drop, the more critique you'll get on your music and therefore the better your production skills will become. I see your point though. Critique gets tiring if it's just people hating on your music and not giving constructive feedback.

Good luck man

The rough sound of my voice is intentional. I want it to sound rough, underground, as raw as possible but at the same time not. There are 2 different recordings playing over eachother hence why it sounds rough. I'm tryna do my own shit you know kinda stick out as much as possible.

[Kvatch]

The beat has been well produced, vocals are a bit loud though and sound untreated. Maybe experiment with guitar amp simulators on your vocals, even just a clean one. Noise gates are also great at removing unwanted breath noises, too, cause you know, not breathing is gangster and all that.

Reverb and delay is also a must on vocals. Abuse the shit out of it and see immediate improvements.

I know you said you don't want critique but in the music industry, contacts are a better tool than any DAW money can buy. You want critique. Quality over quantity applies to most things except dropping music. You want quantity over quality, because the more you drop, the more critique you'll get on your music and therefore the better your production skills will become. I see your point though. Critique gets tiring if it's just people hating on your music and not giving constructive feedback.

Good luck man

The rough sound of my voice is intentional. I want it to sound rough, underground, as raw as possible but at the same time not. There are 2 different recordings playing over eachother hence why it sounds rough. I'm tryna do my own shit you know kinda stick out as much as possible.

Can I recommend the same suggestion, then? Guitar amp sim. with a distorted setting, or just some distortion on your voice? Maybe add a low pass filter to make it sound a bit more bass-heavy and boost the bass frequencies just a little bit? If you've experimented with synthesis before, maybe a sawtooth synth under your voice playing the same notes you sing, just quietly, could enforce that roughness you want?

[Razz]

The beat has been well produced, vocals are a bit loud though and sound untreated. Maybe experiment with guitar amp simulators on your vocals, even just a clean one. Noise gates are also great at removing unwanted breath noises, too, cause you know, not breathing is gangster and all that.

Reverb and delay is also a must on vocals. Abuse the shit out of it and see immediate improvements.

I know you said you don't want critique but in the music industry, contacts are a better tool than any DAW money can buy. You want critique. Quality over quantity applies to most things except dropping music. You want quantity over quality, because the more you drop, the more critique you'll get on your music and therefore the better your production skills will become. I see your point though. Critique gets tiring if it's just people hating on your music and not giving constructive feedback.

Good luck man

The rough sound of my voice is intentional. I want it to sound rough, underground, as raw as possible but at the same time not. There are 2 different recordings playing over eachother hence why it sounds rough. I'm tryna do my own shit you know kinda stick out as much as possible.

Can I recommend the same suggestion, then? Guitar amp sim. with a distorted setting, or just some distortion on your voice? Maybe add a low pass filter to make it sound a bit more bass-heavy and boost the bass frequencies just a little bit? If you've experimented with synthesis before, maybe a sawtooth synth under your voice playing the same notes you sing, just quietly, could enforce that roughness you want?

im gonna be real with you i dont understand any of this its my friend who made up the beat and stuff like that i rapped into my mic. but ill definetely tell him to look at this post so he understands. thanks for the feedback!

[Barkles]

As someone who works in sound and event production professionally and did production at college/uni (before I dropped out lol) I really like it man. Like Kvatch said the only thing that stops this being a proper sales release I think it's just some production on the vocals and balancing really. I'm not sure artistically I'd put a distortion over the whole thing just maybe to emphasise certain things you wanna hear like the end of a sentence or where you switch to your friend and vice versa. But I specialised more in electronic and live band stuff when I was doing studio work, so I'm not expert in the genre! I could go into EQ and such but really it all comes with time and patience and you'll reap what you sow with the how much to work on the production side as much as it's obvious you've worked on the musical side as well

But ye man what I said isn't a criticism at all, just a couple of tips to add the chocolate sprinkles to a cake :3 take it or leave it but I look forward to hearing the next one!

[Cole]

Holy shit, this is top notch mate. Only thing I might change is some of the lyric syncing near the start, sounds a bit off. But apart from that, from someone who listens to this stuff, good work bud!

[pufitee]

I agree with Cole (for once)

Keep up the good work and please release more songs.

[Haamster]

Utterly horrible.

Such vile garbage is exactly what is wrong with the current generation.
Get a job and stop claiming that dwelling on society's bottom is something to be looked up towards.

[Cole]

Wow what a nice inspirational message to leave someone

[Zaidplays]

Wow what a nice inspirational message to leave someone

Hahahahhhahahaha